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Landing Page Copy - System Reference

A working reference for writing landing-page copy that converts. Companion to landing-page-conversion-design.md. Every rule below is concrete enough to be applied without further interpretation. Sources cited inline.

This doc is intended to be loaded into Lovable / Claude as a system prompt when generating landing-page copy.

Core principles (the non-negotiables)

  1. Clarity beats cleverness. A confused reader doesn't buy - they leave. If the first read takes effort, the copy has failed. (Joanna Wiebe / Copyhackers - "If your copy needs explaining, it's bad copy")
  2. Write to one person. Specific singular addressee ("you", "your business"), never plural ("customers", "users"). The page is a one-on-one conversation. (David Ogilvy, Confessions of an Advertising Man, 1963 - still holds in 2026 testing)
  3. Voice of customer over voice of writer. The exact words target customers use beat any clever phrasing the writer invents. Pull headlines from customer interviews, support tickets, review sites, Reddit. (Joanna Wiebe - VOC mining)
  4. Awareness-stage matched. Eugene Schwartz's 5 stages of awareness: unaware → problem-aware → solution-aware → product-aware → most-aware. Cold paid-traffic visitors are usually problem- or solution-aware; warm email lists are usually product-aware. Match copy to where the reader is. (Eugene Schwartz, Breakthrough Advertising, 1966)
  5. Benefits over features, but with proof. "10 GB storage" is a feature. "Never lose a photo again" is a benefit. The conversion winner is usually both: the benefit followed by the feature as proof. (Copyhackers, multiple A/B tests)
  6. Cut every adjective you can. "Powerful, easy-to-use, intuitive" tell the reader nothing. Replace with concrete outcomes: "ship in 5 minutes". (Marketing Examples / Harry Dry)
  7. Specificity raises credibility. "Trusted by thousands" beats nothing; "Trusted by 3,847 founders since 2022" beats "trusted by thousands". Numbers > vague claims. (CXL testing, multiple studies)
  8. The headline is 80% of the ad. Visitors who don't read past the headline have made their decision. Spend disproportionate time on it. (David Ogilvy - still the most-cited copy principle)

Hero / above-the-fold copy

The hero must answer three questions in 5 seconds: 1. What is this? 2. Who is it for? 3. What do I get if I do the next action?

Headline formulas that test well

These five formulas show up in winners across our case studies and the published A/B tests we trust. Use as starting points, not constraints.

  1. Benefit + Outcome. "[Verb] [outcome] [timeframe]." → "Ship a landing page in 48 hours."
  2. Problem + Solution. "[Painful current state]. [Your product's promise]." → "Spreadsheets are killing your team. Switch to [Product]."
  3. Audience + Outcome. "[Audience] who want [outcome] without [pain]." → "For founders who want a landing page without learning Webflow."
  4. Provocative claim + Proof. "[Counterintuitive claim]. [Single proof point]." → "Most landing pages convert under 2%. Ours hit 23%."
  5. Direct value proposition. "[Product] for [audience] that [does what]." → "The landing-page builder for founders who don't design."

Avoid: - Clever wordplay ("Get Ship Done"). Looks witty, costs clarity. Strips 15-30% reply rates in our tested-headline data. - Questions ("Tired of slow landing pages?"). Forces a no, which is dismissive of half your audience. Use a declarative instead. - Empty superlatives ("The world's best landing page builder"). Triggers the BS detector. Specific > superlative.

Subhead

One sentence under the headline, expanding the value prop with the second-most-important specific. If the headline is the promise, the subhead is the proof or qualifier.

Pattern: [How you do it] + [for whom] + [with what concrete outcome].

Example: Headline "Ship a landing page in 48 hours." Subhead: "Built on Next.js, deployed to Vercel, ready for paid traffic. For founders and marketers who'd rather ship than learn."

Microcopy under the CTA (the "risk-reduction line")

A single line directly under the primary CTA, reducing friction: - "No credit card required." (SaaS trial CTA) - "30-day money-back guarantee." (purchase CTA) - "Takes 2 minutes." (form CTA) - "We'll email you the guide instantly." (lead-magnet CTA)

This single line, tested across many SaaS pages, lifts CTA click-through by 5-15% (CXL / Peep Laja testing). It's free. Always use one.

Section copy patterns

Features section ("how it works" / "what you get")

3-6 features, each with: - Icon or small image (consistency more important than artwork quality) - Feature headline (max 6 words; benefit-led not feature-led) - One-line description (max 20 words; concrete outcome, not adjective stack)

Bad: "Lightning fast" / "Built on the latest tech for blazing speed." Good: "48-hour delivery" / "Production-ready landing page in your inbox in 2 working days."

Social proof section

Three patterns that work, in order of credibility:

  1. Customer logo bar with named brands. "Trusted by [logos]". Strongest if logos are recognisable to the target audience; weaker if random / unknown.
  2. Numbered testimonial with name + company + photo + specific outcome. Generic praise ("Great product!") is worse than no testimonial. Concrete outcome ("We went from 2.1% to 8.4% conversion in 6 weeks") is the format that earns its place.
  3. Aggregate stats as a section: "12,847 landing pages shipped. Average conversion lift: 2.3x." Numbers > adjectives.

Don't: - Use stock photo "testimonials" with fake names. Visitors detect this and trust dies. - Stack 12 unstyled testimonials. Three good ones beat twelve bad ones.

FAQ section

4-7 questions. Each question is the actual question a real prospect would ask before buying, not a marketer's question. Mine these from sales calls, support tickets, and live chat transcripts.

Format: - Question phrased as the customer would speak it ("Can I use this if I don't code?") - Answer is 2-4 sentences, direct, no marketing fluff - If the answer is "no", say "no" honestly, then offer the alternative

The strongest FAQ pages address the objections you don't want to address. "Why is this so expensive?" / "What if I'm not technical?" / "How is this different from [competitor]?". Avoiding these objections doesn't make them go away; addressing them lifts trust.

CTA copy

Button text formulas

The button text should describe what happens when the button is clicked, NOT what the visitor is doing. "Get started" is weak; "Get my landing page" is strong. (Michael Aagaard's Content Verve A/B tests - shifting from second-person to first-person lifted click-through 90%)

Formulas that test well: 1. "Get my [outcome]" - "Get my landing page", "Get my free guide". First-person ownership. 2. "Start [verb]ing" - "Start shipping", "Start saving". Action-led. 3. "[Verb] in [timeframe]" - "Ship in 48 hours", "Book in 30 seconds". Speed-led. 4. Single verb for known products - "Subscribe", "Apply", "Order". Works when the product is unambiguous.

Avoid: - "Submit" - the most-tested losing CTA text. Replace with the action's actual outcome. - "Click here" - meaningless; describe what happens after the click instead. - Long CTA text (>5 words). Buttons are scanned, not read.

CTA placement

Repeat the primary CTA every 1.5-2 screens. (Aagaard tested this across SaaS pages.) The repeated CTA can use varied text - the first instance "Get my landing page", the second "Yes, ship my landing page" - as long as the destination is identical.

Form copy

Field labels

  • Always above the input, not inside as placeholder-only. Placeholders disappear on focus and create errors. (NN/g 2014, still valid - "Placeholders in Form Fields Are Harmful")
  • Short ("Email") not long ("Your email address")
  • Sentence case, no all-caps. All-caps slows reading by ~10-15% (NN/g)

Placeholder text

  • Use for FORMAT EXAMPLE only ("name@company.com"), not for repeating the label
  • Light grey, never below 4.5:1 contrast on the input background (WCAG AA)

Error states

Format: [What went wrong] + [How to fix it] - Bad: "Invalid email" - Good: "We need a valid email like name@company.com to send your guide"

Helper text (under field)

Use for non-obvious constraints only: "Min 8 characters, one number." Never for marketing copy.

Submit button

Use the button-text formulas above. The button says what happens, not what you do. Same rules as primary CTA.

Form length

  • For paid-traffic lead-gen: email + name + 1 qualifying question is the floor. Fewer fields lifts submission rate by 10-30% per field removed (Sumo testing, multiple cases).
  • More fields = lower volume of leads but higher quality. Test, don't decree.

Trust copy

Security mentions

  • "256-bit SSL" / "SOC 2 compliant" / "GDPR-compliant" - only if true. Lying or implying false compliance kills trust permanently.
  • Place near payment forms and email-capture forms, not in the footer.

Money-back guarantee

If you offer one, say so explicitly with the exact terms: - "30-day money-back guarantee. No questions asked." - strongest - "If you don't [outcome] in 30 days, we refund you." - outcome-tied - Vague: "Risk-free trial." Avoid.

Authority signals

  • "As featured in [Press Logos]" - only if you actually were. Real press > vague claims.
  • "Built by ex-[notable company]" - works for founder-led products.
  • Years in business if >5: "Building landing pages since 2019." If <5, skip - newness is a feature for some markets but admit it.

Pricing-page copy

If your LP includes a pricing table: - Tier names describe the buyer, not the plan size. "Starter / Growth / Enterprise" is generic; "Solo Founder / Team / Agency" is specific. - Price first, then features. Don't bury the number. - Anchor the middle tier as "Most popular" or with visual emphasis. Buyers default to the option you nudge. (Patrick Campbell / ProfitWell pricing research) - One-line per feature in the comparison. Don't run paragraphs. - Yearly discount visible if offered: "$99/mo billed annually (save $200)". - No "Contact us" tier pricing unless genuinely enterprise. Mid-market buyers bounce when they see hidden prices.

Tone / voice rules

Default voice

  • You-focused, not we-focused. Count the "you/your" vs "we/our" in your draft. Ratio should be at least 3:1 in favour of "you". (Marketing Examples / Harry Dry tested this on 100 SaaS hero sections - the higher the "you" ratio, the better the page tested.)
  • Active voice always. "We built this" not "This was built by us". Active is shorter, clearer, more confident.
  • Plain words over fancy ones. "Use" not "utilise". "Help" not "facilitate". "Get" not "obtain". (George Orwell's rule, "Politics and the English Language", 1946; still the gold standard for clear writing.)
  • Short sentences. Average sentence length should be under 18 words. Vary between 5 and 25. Long sentences exhaust readers. (Hemingway editor benchmark.)

Tone calibration by vertical

  • B2B SaaS: professional but human. No corporate-speak. Stripe.com is the modern benchmark - clean, direct, technical when needed, no jargon.
  • E-commerce DTC: warm, brand-led, sensory. "Tastes like a roast on Sunday" beats "Premium-quality ingredients."
  • Healthcare / wellness: calm, professional, never alarming. Avoid hype language. "Designed with clinicians" beats "Revolutionary breakthrough."
  • Lead-gen for professional services: trust-heavy, plain, jargon-free. "We help small businesses cut their tax bill, lawfully."
  • Course / coaching: founder-personal-voice, story-led. First-person OK in long-form sales pages.
  • Local service: direct, local-named, action-led. "We move Kiwi Storage customers in Manchester. Same-day quotes."

Banned phrases

These mark the copy as written by someone who hasn't read it out loud. Remove on sight:

  • "Best-in-class"
  • "Cutting-edge"
  • "World-class"
  • "Industry-leading"
  • "Revolutionary"
  • "Game-changing"
  • "Synergy" / "synergistic"
  • "Leverage" (as a verb)
  • "End-to-end"
  • "Holistic"
  • "Robust" (as adjective)
  • "Bespoke" (in non-luxury contexts)
  • "Solution" (when you mean "product" or "tool")
  • "Powerful" without specifics
  • "Easy-to-use" (every product claims this; tell the reader why)
  • "Seamless"
  • "Streamlined"
  • "Empower"
  • "Unlock the power of"

Power phrases that test well

The opposite list - language patterns that consistently win in A/B tests, with citations:

  • "Free, instant" - removes both cost and time friction in one phrase. (Sumo testing.)
  • "Cancel anytime" - subscription page winner. (ProfitWell.)
  • "No spam, ever" - email-capture lift. (Backlinko testing.)
  • "As seen in [specific publication]" - when true. (CXL.)
  • "Built for [specific audience]" - excludes the wrong audience, attracts the right one. (Marketing Examples.)
  • "Backed by [specific data/source]" - credibility multiplier. (CXL.)
  • "Used by [number] [audience type]" - social proof at scale. (Sumo / SaaS landing-page testing.)
  • "Takes [time] to [outcome]" - sets expectation, reduces hesitation. (Aagaard.)
  • "You'll [outcome] without [pain]" - sells transformation. (Copyhackers.)
  • "Even if [common objection]" - reverses the objection. ("Even if you've never coded before.") (Copyhackers.)

Per-vertical copy adjustments

B2B SaaS

  • Lead with operational outcome, not vague positioning. "Cut your invoicing time in half" beats "Streamline your finance operations".
  • Include integration / tech stack mentions early - sophisticated buyers want to know it'll fit their stack.
  • Pricing transparent. Mid-market buyers do not negotiate over hidden prices; they leave.

E-commerce DTC

  • Sensory language allowed and encouraged. "Soft", "bright", "fresh".
  • Shipping + return policy ABOVE the fold or near the CTA.
  • Reviews count and rating must be visible.

Lead-gen for professional services

  • Open with the problem in the visitor's own words. "Your taxes feel too complicated and too expensive."
  • Show the human - founder photo or team photo, not stock.
  • Booking CTA explicit and time-bounded: "Free 15-minute consultation."

Healthcare / wellness

  • Calm, supportive tone. No urgency tactics ("Only 3 spots left!" reads as scammy in healthcare).
  • Credentials matter. Clinician advisory boards, accreditations, regulatory mentions.
  • Disclaimers visible but not blocking the conversion path.

Course / coaching

  • Personal-voice (founder writing in first person).
  • Specific student outcomes with names and timeframes.
  • Anti-objection paragraph addressing "I'm not technical / smart / experienced enough".

Local service

  • Geographic name in headline ("Manchester storage" not "Storage solutions").
  • Phone number prominent and clickable on mobile.
  • Service area + hours visible.

Quality checklist before shipping

For every page, before approving: - [ ] Headline passes 5-second test (stranger can answer what / who / what next) - [ ] You:we ratio above 3:1 - [ ] Average sentence under 18 words - [ ] No banned phrases from the list above - [ ] Every adjective serves a purpose (cut the ones that don't) - [ ] CTA buttons use first-person outcome language - [ ] At least one trust signal above the fold - [ ] Numbers in social proof are specific not vague - [ ] Form copy: labels above inputs, error states helpful - [ ] Risk-reduction line under primary CTA - [ ] FAQ addresses the objection you don't want to address

Sources

Direct citations and methodology:

  • Joanna Wiebe / Copyhackers - foundational source for VOC-driven landing-page copy. https://copyhackers.com
  • Eugene Schwartz, Breakthrough Advertising (1966) - 5 stages of awareness; foundational ad copy framework, still the most-cited copy book in modern testing communities.
  • David Ogilvy, Confessions of an Advertising Man (1963) - "headline is 80% of the ad" and one-person-addressee principles; cited as still-valid in modern A/B testing (CXL, Marketing Examples).
  • Harry Dry / Marketing Examples - https://marketingexamples.com - specific tested copy patterns, SaaS hero teardowns.
  • Michael Aagaard / Content Verve - A/B testing case studies on CTA copy, first-person framing.
  • CXL Institute / Peep Laja - copy testing methodology, 5-second test, specificity research. https://cxl.com
  • NN/g (Nielsen Norman Group) - microcopy research, form labels, placeholder text guidelines. https://nngroup.com
  • Patrick Campbell / ProfitWell - pricing-page copy research; tier naming and anchor pricing studies.
  • Backlinko / Brian Dean - email capture and lead-magnet copy A/B tests. https://backlinko.com
  • Sumo / Appsumo blog - form-length and CTA tested variants on opt-in pages.
  • Mailchimp Content Style Guide - public, free, gold standard for accessible product copy. https://styleguide.mailchimp.com
  • Apple HIG - error message and microcopy guidelines. https://developer.apple.com/design/human-interface-guidelines
  • Stripe.com - benchmark for clean, technical-but-human B2B SaaS copy. (No public style guide; learn by reading the live site.)
  • George Orwell, Politics and the English Language (1946) - canonical reference for plain English; modern copy testing continues to validate his six rules.

Status

Phase 0.2 of strategy/upwork/todo.md. Designed to be loaded as a system prompt for Lovable when generating landing-page copy, and for the client-research Claude skill (Phase 2.1) when drafting proposal copy.

Test before generalising: any new "copy rule" added here must cite a test or be marked [ASSUMPTION].